You know what your problem is, Denis? You don’t appreciate the "in-between." DENIS The what?
If you are building this into a full "piece," here are three directions the story could go:
Wears a leather jacket that’s seen better days. He’s eating a plate of cold fries. scenarii kriminalnaja chtiva
The diner is empty except for a sleepy WAITRESS cleaning a coffee machine in the background. The fluorescent lights hum—a low, irritating buzz.
(Slams his hand on the table)The fries are frozen in the middle! And the guy in the trunk is the son of the man who owns this entire zip code! You know what your problem is, Denis
Dressed in a sharp, expensive suit that looks out of place. He is vibrating with nervous energy. [INT. DINER - NIGHT]
The in-between. The time after the mess is made but before it’s cleaned up. It’s the only time a man can actually think. Right now, we aren't criminals. We’re just two guys having fries at 3 AM. Enjoy the fries. He’s eating a plate of cold fries
(Whispering loudly)Max, we’re sitting here. We’re literally sitting here like we’re waiting for a bus. Do you know what’s in that trunk?