Whether you’re looking at it from a pop-culture perspective or using it as a gritty opening hook, that’s a heavy-hitter of a sentence. It sets a tone of inevitable descent and raw, maybe even cynical, realism.
Should we focus on the or the consequences of following her? This bitch takes you to the dark side of the fo...
To help you flesh out this draft, what direction are we taking? Whether you’re looking at it from a pop-culture
Is this a metaphor for an addiction , a toxic relationship, or a specific city/environment? To help you flesh out this draft, what
Are you writing about a specific character (like a femme fatale or a corrupted mentor) who leads a protagonist astray?
Is this the start of a hard-boiled noir or a modern-day thriller?
The "dark side of the force" reference implies a subversion of something that was meant to be good or balanced. If you give me a bit more context on the "she" or the setting, I can help you structure the next few paragraphs.